NiceS VisualPoem from Kapaa Middle School MEDIA on Vimeo
My visual poem is about family. This visual poem makes an impact to me because family is everything. Family is what this world is made of. I think this poem topic is used quite a lot because it's a poem about family, everyone loves writing about their family's.
On most of my special effects I think it caused this poem to be more dramatic. Also that the overall meaning is good because it's about family. I also think the mood was set good because with the heavy low music in the background it kind of adds a dramatic tone to the story.
In the end I feel like my visual poem turned out pretty good, even though I don't have much video footage and that I have a lot of pictures, I still think it turned out really good. To improve or make my video better, I would try to get more B-Roll of my family actually doing family things. Like having fun together, or laughing and talking about life. Also in one part of my video it talks about a family being like a book and how if you find an ending you know their love is near, it shows a picture and it says 'and they lived happily ever after," I think that it didn't really match, also that I got it off the internet so it wasn't really mine. All together I still think I did pretty good on this project.
I liked your poem.
ReplyDeleteThe ending was a tad quick.
I liked your B-Roll.
I was able to relate easily.
ReplyDeleteYou said family a lot.
The poem was easily heard.
Great and applicable B-Roll. During your voice-over, you could tell you stumbled over your words and paused when you were saying "Families are made of love and tears..." Awesome job writing and performing your poem, it turned out really great!
ReplyDeleteThe poem was deep and intriguing
ReplyDeleteYou sounded like you forgot part of your poem in one section about tears.
Your audio was very loud and clear
Great sequencing. I think instead of just cutting the end you should've faded it out. Great use of the kens burns effect.
ReplyDeleteThe pictures all had good kens burns affect so it went smoothly.
ReplyDeleteI think that the audio could of gone a bit smoother.
There was really nice B-Roll that matched with the poem.
Your visuals matched your poem. It sounded like you messed up a little towards the end. The music complimented your visual poem well.
ReplyDeleteHi Sydney. Nice poem, I really liked that your background music wasn't too loud. One thing you could do to make your video better, you could make your last scene less abrupt. One last thing that I liked about your poem was that you used very fitting music.
ReplyDeleteI like your b-roll of your family. You were kind of reading weird like you would pause in the middle of the sentence. I also like you background music because it fits in. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI really liked how all of your shots related to what you were saying.
ReplyDeleteThe ending was bit off, it went a little too fast.
I also liked how you had lots of pictures and b-roll.
Your audio was not too loud and not too soft.
ReplyDeleteYou stuttered a bit near the ending of your poem
Overall great poem
I really like the ending shot of the photos in the "love" shape. It sounded like you weren't prepared for the voiceover. All the shots were clear and vibrant.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your music matched your poem pretty well. Maybe next time you could have gotten B-Roll of your actual family instead of just pictures. Your voice was clear when you read your peom and there was no background noise, well done.
ReplyDeleteHai Sydney! Awesome work with your visual poem! I really like how your voice was loud and clear throughout the whole video. One thing I would suggest is to speak a little bit more slower because the poem moved a tad too fast and when you reached "Families are made of love and tears", it seemed that you speeded up. Either way, your visuals are absolutely amazing since it was not blurry at the least and really related to your poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked that your audio was clear and easy to understand. I think that you could've re-filmed your voiceover or edited out the part where you paused. I also liked how your b-roll matched what you were saying.
ReplyDeleteGreat Pictures its very personal which I don't think I could do. Maybe put a little more emotion into what you are saying. I love the edits and transitions you used. Amazing!!
ReplyDeleteYour music matched and your poem was great. Next time try for more people instead of just pictures. The voice over was clear and the b-roll matched.
ReplyDeleteNice job Sydney! The B-Roll was great, it was very nice to see.
ReplyDeleteThere were a few pauses and stumbling.
The poem was read clearly! Awesome job Sydney!
B-roll was nice.PICTURES :(. I liked that I saw what you said.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used your own family pictures for b-roll. I think that you could've re-filmed you voiceover because you had a pause in it. I also liked how you showed expression in your voiceover.
ReplyDelete1.) I really liked the meaning of your poem and haw you included very applicable b-roll.
ReplyDelete2.) I think you could have read your poem more smoothly and also at the end the last work kind of cut-off.
3.) You did a great job, I really enjoyed how incorporated a lot of pictures!
Compliment: Awesome video, really clear shots and clear speaking and the volume is great, love the kens burn you used and the way you used it same for the rest of the effects.
ReplyDeleteImprovements: Maybe improve on one part that you hesitated to speak and you corrected yourself, maybe you could redo that so it sounds like you're actually saying it yourself.
Compliment: But overall, I really liked your story, it was very unique.
Your choice of music went well with the mood of your poem. I think that you could have gotten more clips of other people. Your use of effects was very nice.
ReplyDeleteYou had some really nice b-roll. It seemed like you cut the ending off a little to soon. It was a really great poem overall.
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